Grog Blogger Eileen Meyer here -- I’m delighted to invite author and poet Michelle Schaub to join us with a guest post today! Michelle is sharing the story of a manuscript that was near and dear to her heart, but had been rejected numerous times. After she took a break to re-envision her project, and then revise accordingly – IT SOLD!
Here’s the story of KINDNESS IS A KITE STRING, releasing April 1st (and I'm not FOOLing you!) with Cardinal Rule Press.
When I first decided to write a concept book about kindness, this was my recipe:
Mix together a list of kind acts.
Fold in some lyrical language.
Season with rhyme.
Plain and simple. Unfortunately, a little too simple. Here’s some of editorial feedback I received after my first round of submissions:
“I don't think this feels like a real picture book, but more like something you'd see in a kid magazine.”
“I wish there were a clearer protagonist or some tension.”
“I love the message here, but I'm afraid that I don't think that there is enough story for this to work on our list.”
Editors wanted a triple-decker club sandwich, and I all I had handed them was bread. I needed more layers to create a mouthwatering manuscript.
LAYER 1: AN ARC
I knew most editors had a taste for character-driven manuscripts with strong story arcs. While I didn’t want to write my text as a narrative, I wondered if I could suggest an arc through the illustrations.
About this time, I saw a commercial that sparked an idea. Set in a city, the commercial starts with one man’s kind deed: he stops a lady from crossing the street in front of a speeding car. In turn, that lady helps a mom carry her stroller off the bus. The mom then helps another person, and the kind acts ripple forward.
I decided to use art notes to suggest a similar chain of kind deeds in my manuscript. As a rule, I try to limit art notes. I like giving illustrators room to breathe their own life into a picture book. But in this case, I felt the needed to provide a visual nudge to editors so they could picture how my simple words might ignite a rich visual narrative.
I added this open-ended art note to the beginning of my manuscript:
[For each spread, I have provided art suggestions for one possible way the chain of kindness might grow through a diverse community; however, I am open to other visual interpretations.]
Then on each page, I included a short note that suggested a kind act and “actor” for that spread. Ultimately, Claire LaForte put her own delightful spin on my art notes. She created a beautiful visual story of a diverse individuals coming together to spread kindness.
LAYER 2: A QUEST
My own kids always enjoyed picture books where they had to search for something in the pictures. (Think Richard Scary’s Lowly Worm.) This gave me the idea to suggest a “hunt” for a missing pet. So, I added this art note to the first spread:
[No one notices a pet has slipped out. In subsequent illustrations, family members put up lost pet posters/search for pet]
In the final book, readers can follow the hunt for an adorable missing dog. (Don’t worry, the dog is ultimately reunited with its family.)
LAYER 3: EDUCATIONAL HOOK
I wanted to make sure educators found my book tasty. As a language arts teacher, I knew curriculum standards across grade levels focused on teaching similes and metaphors. So, I started brainstorming tangible, kid-friendly objects to which I could compare kindness.
Kindness is like sunshine because it warms you.
Kindness welcomes others like an open door.
When you let it out, kindness can lift spirits like a kite string.
To infuse educational flavor, I reshaped my text as a series of comparisons and added an author’s note to further explain the concept of similes and metaphors.
My newly layered concept book “sandwich” was ready to deliver to
editors. After a few nibbles from different houses, Maria Dismondy at Cardinal Rule Press sunk her teeth in and offered me a contract.
Now that I can hold KINDNESS IS A KITE STRING in my hands, I really appreciate the value of the added layers. They provide readers with a reason to return to the book again and again and discover different ways to satisfy their appetite… and spread a little kindness!
Michelle Schaub is a language arts teacher and award-winning children's poet. In addition to her upcoming book, Kindness is a Kite String, The Uplifting Power of Empathy, she is the author of the picture book poetry collections Fresh-Picked Poetry: A Day at the Farmers’ Market, (which won the 2018 Growing Good Kids Award and 2019 Northern Lights Book Award,) and Finding Treasure: A Collection of Collections. She also wrote the bedtime STEM book in verse, Dream Big, Little Scientists. Her poems appear in several anthologies, including A World Full of Poems (DK, 2020) and Hop to It, Poems to Get You Moving (Pomelo Books, 2020) Aloud. Michelle shares lessons and mentor texts for using poetry to boost literacy at www.poetryboost.com. Find out more about Michelle at https://www.michelleschaub.com/
Michelle, thank you for sharing this helpful post.ReplyDelete
Your welcome, Joyce! Thanks for the positive feedback.Delete
Congratulations! Thanks for sharing your process!ReplyDelete
Have to give insight!Delete
Wwo, Michelle, you gave us all the tools to create a delectable story that could be gobbled up by agents & editors! TY.ReplyDelete
Your welcome, Kathy. Thanks for boosting this on KidLit 411 too!Delete
Thanks, Michelle! I was honored to meet you at a Highlights workshop, and I’m so happy to read of your success! Love the sandwich analogy!ReplyDelete
Nice to hear from you, Deborah. Ahhh, Highlights. Isn't that place nirvana?? I can't wait to return sometime...Delete
This is SO helpful Michelle! Congrats on the book and thank you for sharing this peek at your creation process!ReplyDelete
You are welcome, Cathy. Glad you found it helpful!Delete
Fun post, Michelle! I enjoyed reading about your writing and publishing journey with this book--and loved the delicious sandwich you created with your prose.ReplyDelete
Great revision work Michelle. And thank you for sharing your process!ReplyDelete
My pleasure, Colleen!Delete
Thank you for sharing your success with the revision process for KINDNESS IS A KITE STRING.ReplyDelete
SCBWI Illinois, Springfield Scribes are in for a treat coming in May. All members are excited for you to join us as a guest speaker.
Thanks, Suzy! I'm looking forward to the Springfield event too!Delete
Wonderful post! Thanks so much.ReplyDelete
You are welcome!Delete
This is so good. Thanks for sharing.ReplyDelete
Harshita, I'm glad you enjoyed it! Hope there's a good take-away (or should I say "carry-out") somewhere in it for you.ReplyDelete
Layers are definitely the way to go. More layers more better. Congrats on finding your MS a home!ReplyDelete
Thanks, Jilanne. Hooray for layers!ReplyDelete
Congratulations Michelle! Thank you for the tips on layering a story. They made a delectable sandwich filled with terrific thought and advice.ReplyDelete
Thanks for your positive words!ReplyDelete
Thanks for your generosity to your fellow authors and those struggling to make sense of the process.ReplyDelete
great post! I love the image of a sandwich.ReplyDelete
Very helpful! Thank you!ReplyDelete
Glad you found my thoughts helpful, Judy!Delete
Congrats on your book and its upcoming release. The world needs books like these, and the layering is delicious, and a good reminder about multifaceted approaches. A musical tie in: Susan Salidor's song "One Little Act of Kindness." It's on YouTube.ReplyDelete
Great post. Thank you for sharing your successful revision process. I am currently layering some sandwiches and this is very helpful.ReplyDelete
Great post, Michelle and Eileen! I love how adding layers can help turn a quiet manuscript into a winning text.ReplyDelete
Michelle wrote an insightful and helpful article for all of us looking for that tasty entree we hope to create! Bravo!Delete
This is really good information, and it's something we can chew on and digest as we move our manuscripts forward. Thanks for sharing your expertise.ReplyDelete
Thanks for sharing the journey of your beautiful book, Michelle! I enjoyed reading all your insights.ReplyDelete